make sense-- logically, grammatically, thematically engage their attention
provide substantive and relevant information stand out from the crowd（提供实实在在的信息）
How to get started（如何开始）
Write down two or three experiences you feel have shaped who you are. Write down two or three significant problems you have faced and how you solved them. Then look for patterns.
what values keep popping up?
what interests?
what strengths and skills?
Now take a look at your transcript.
how does your coursework express your interests and talents?
how has it developed them?
The writing process（写作过程）
Try several different approaches until you find one that feels right. Revise, revise, revise! If you need help on structure, visit the Writing Workshop.
As you write, show your essay to people who know you well and ask if it accurately expresses who you are. Be sure to show your essay to faculty advisors before you send off a final version
Some common pitfalls（一些常见的问题）
Weak essays generally share one or more of the following characteristics:
melodramatic or self-congratulatory statements
vague, abstract ideals
laundry lists of achievements
jargon and specialized vocabulary
misspelled words
poor grammar
convoluted syntax
For more information, contact:
Beth Fiori, Fellowship Coordinator
103 Barnes Hall
btf1@cornell.edu