Since you’re not sure about the format or progression of thought that you would like to use, I will give you a suggested outline. I can then read your version of the essay and edit that. Please use email to communicate with me.
Outline:
1. Introduction:
Since you would like to use the theme of Ecclesiastes 3, it would be a good idea to employ a framing device. A framing device is a type of overarching theme that you introduce at the beginning and refer to in the conclusion. This creates a sense of continuity and originality. My advice would be to open with a comment on this biblical chapter, and then apply it to your life.
2. Your history:
I know it must be painful for you to refer to the death of your second child, but this will show the admissions committee that you are a mature person, who has lived deeply, suffered deeply, and emerged stronger for the process. Your problems with your childhood (foster homes) should also be briefly referred to. Try to express what you have learned from this, and then carry those lessons into your discussion of your adult life. Perhaps you could say that you learned compassion, which is an essential aspect of any medical career. Then you could apply that to your job in the prison, where you felt deep sympathy for the inmates and tried to give them the care that any human being deserves, whether or not he has committed a crime. That’s one of the basic tenets of medicine (all people deserve good care), so it would be good to write about it. This is also the section in which you should mention any pertinent experiences in the workplace. Medical schools like people with a lot of experience in different areas, so always try to demonstrate the ways in which you have learned and grown from a particular job or event.
3. Your experiences in college and your preparations for the medical career: