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Dr. XXX . . . For the past seven years of my life, my decision to become a doctor has been a devoted one. From the first day that I entered Mrs. Vandenburg's tenth grade Anatomy and Physiology class, my career ambitions were narrowed to one as I completely committed myself to becoming a physician. During that semester of class I poured through every page of my textbook, fascinated and challenged by all that I learned. Night after night I stayed up memorizing the names of bones and muscles, systems and processes in early preparation for my career in medicine. Hungry for more information about the medical profession, I began reading literally dozens of books and journal articles written about the lives of physicians and the medical fields in which they served. As I finished High School and entered college, and now Graduate School, every class that I have taken, every decision I have made has been centered around one goal; to become a physician whole-heartedly committed to improving the physical and emotional lives of his patients.
Today, I continue in my unwavering journey toward becoming a physician by attending Graduate School at XXX University.
In the words of Washington Irving, "Nothing in the world can take the place of persistence. Talent will not; nothing is more common than unsuccessful men with talent. Genius will not; unrewarded genius is almost a proverb. Education will not; the world is full of educated derelicts. Persistence and determination alone are omnipotent. Great minds have purposes, little minds have wishes."