5 A 5 paper presents a well-developed analysis of the complexities of the issue and demonstrates a strong control of the elements of effective writing.
看着这个标准觉不觉得似曾相识呢?是的,和6分作文的差距只是三个词,六分作文要求的是cogent,well-articulated analysis,还有对语言的要求是mastery of the elements of effective wrting.
附六分相应的标准:
A 6 paper presents a cogent, well-articulated analysis of the complexities of the issue and demonstrates mastery of the elements of effective writing.
但是大家注意到没有,ETS对二者的共同要求都是: effective writing.这里我问一个问题,大家对这个好象是似乎是理解的,但是谁可以给我一个确切的effective writing的答案?到底什么是effective writing?他有什么样的特点?运用什么样的devices才可以让我的writing变得effective?这个答案我有,但是我想让大家自问一下然后跟贴写出自己的理解来,这个题目的讨论结束后我会给大家一个确切的答案。ETS的标准写的似乎很简单明了,但是实际上里面的陷阱不少。
SAMPLE-2 (score 5)
Specialists are not overrated today.开篇的第一句就和6分作文有差距了。More generalists may be needed, but not to overshadow the specialists. Generalists can provide a great deal of information on many topics of interest with a broad range of ideas. People who look at the overall view of things can help with some of the large problems our society faces today. But specialists are necessary to gain a better understanding of more in depth methods to solve problems or fixing things.
看完了这个开头部分,大家再想想昨天评过的6分文章,差距就是差距啊,这个1分的差距还很大呢。这个5分的例文显然就没有6分的简介一针见血的感觉。而且语言不够简练。这个文章开头的general statement就只是解释了对topic的理解,不够深刻。而且这第一段的最后三句话完全可以变成一句话用定语从句套着来写,这样句式也就相对的复杂多了,也简洁多了。这个看起来,这个开头,只能说是刚跳出了个4分的高度,如果后面文章的结构组织的好并且事例充足或者论证的比较严密还是可以达到个4。5---5。5的,但是6分这个的开头是基本没希望咯。